Sexuality essay paragraph improved

Essay answer: Sexuality

Improved paragraph.

*When the heterosexual woman is on screen, there is soft non-diagetic music, with happy-sounding, light, fast tones of a piano, to connote a buoyant and blissful atmosphere which could associate with her stereotypical feminine personality. Deliberately added together with some jump-cut shots of the homosexual woman, to imply a close relationship, it also shows a happy, comfortable relationship between the characters. This relationship is also represented in some fading shots between them, to suggest the calm and smooth relationship that the protagonist sees with the woman, compared to the staggered and sharp cuts between the scenes with her boyfriend, where there is a troubled relationship. The shots of the heterosexual woman are also sometimes longer, to represent how the homosexual woman stares at her longer and wants more from her, juxtapositioned with shorter more medium length shots of the protagonist to represent how oblivious the heterosexual woman is and is satisfied with the way things are.*

 

This is improved because a lot more terminology has been used to outline the media concepts I'm talking about more clearly. It is also longer and points more backed up  with uses of other examples from the clip.